YOUNG PEOPLE AND OLD PEOPLE (LIKE A RABBIT AND
TURTLE)
Last night there was my
birthday party. I gave a party. I invited a lot of my relatives. That night was
so wonderful. My cousins and I had got amusing time but I couldn’t say the same
thing for my grandparents. While time was passing, they were getting bored.
When we switched on music, they couldn’t stand music and they went to their
home. That moment, I realized that young people’s lives do not like old
people’s lives. In fact, the lives of young people and old people differ in
terms of the time they spend activities, the kind of ideas, the speed of their
movements, the using of technologic devices.
First, young people and old
people spend different amounts of time with activities. Young people spend more
time with activities than old people do. Young people always are energetic. They
have a lot of parties, games. Generally, they do something in contrast old
people aren’t busy. They sit at home and they go to out randomly. Their
relatives visit them at their home. Old people only go weddings.
Second, young people and old
people have different ideas. Young people don’t think everything in detail.
They can easily choose in contrast old people are so selective. For example;
when young people want to buy a dress, they don’t wait to buy it. The important
thing is young people’s feelings. Their ideas are for saving day. Old people
don’t like young people. Choosing a dress or something else isn’t easy for old
people. They think everything with details. When they think buy that dress, they
think the next day.
Third, young people and old
people have different speeds to do something. Young people are more active than
old people. Young people have advantage thanks to their body. Their body is
dynamic and fresh. So, they don’t tired easily. They can run for a long time
and they can work without break. Old people are absolutely different from young
people for this state. Old people aren’t strong so they don’t do tiresome
things. They like heavy working machine. After a while, their engine doesn’t
start. Also, we can say that young people and old people like rabbit and
turtle.
The last difference is the
using technologic devices. Young people use continual technology. They are
interested in technologic devices. Formerly, people wrote letter but now, they
use e-mail. Young people do all their needs with technology. Generally, old
people don’t use technology. So, old people want to do something, they may
spend a lot of time and they may come across difficulty.
To sum up, people’s age affect their
life. Young people and old people differ from each other. Whereas young people
think their life is better than old people’s life, old people have opposite
idea. This opposition is known for a long time. There is a word : ‘’Every age
has different beauties.’’
-Last night there was my birthday party. I gave a party. You could use ''and''
YanıtlaSil-I realized that young people’s lives do not like old people’s lives. ''aren't like''
-Young people spend more time (with activities) '' with doing activities''
- go (to) out
-When they think *buy that dress (gerund or infinitive)
-Young people and old people *like rabbit and turtle ( be missing)
-Young people use continual technology. (revise this sentence)
1) I invited a lot of my relatives( revise this sentence.)
YanıtlaSil2) I realized that young people’s lives *do not like old people’s lives . You had 3)used wrong word. It should be '' aren't like ''.
4)When they think buy that dress, they think the next day. ( revise this sentence)
5)Young people and old people *like rabbit and turtle. There isn't an auxiliary verb here.
I liked your work ,but you can give some more specific examples in your body paragraphs.