Argumentative Essay 2-First Draft

                   Why Are Americans Rapidly Becoming More Obese?

                 Obesity is the accumulation of excess fat in the body. People think that obesity is due to excessive consumption. It is believed that obesity is a disease. Nowadays, obesity is so common in America. One of every three people in America is obese. Everyone think that reason is eating much food. I think there is no only reason. There are many reasons for obesity in America.

                  First, life is much more sedentary in America. Physical inactivity is one of the risk factors causing death in the world. In America, the technology is advanced level so people can do a lot of work from their seats. Also, spending more time with television and computer causes disease such as obesity or shorten lifespan. People, who spend free time with computer and television, do not take the time to exercise are obese.

               Second, obesity is related poverty. In America, fresh and quality foods are very expensive. So, people buy stale and poor quality foods. People put on weight quickly by eating these carbohydrate foods. Most of the people think that rich people have a lot of money so they eat too and they get fat but the exact opposite is true. Rich people are not overweight because they have quality foods and they eat orderly.

              Final, people do not know negative effects of fast-food. Fast-food do not balanced in terms of certain nutrients so it may cause some health problems. At the beginning of health problems, obesity comes first. In America, some people wanted to warn people about fast-food’s negative effects.  After there were several cases, Cheeseburger Bill which is a draft law was created. According to this draft law, people did not complain from food manufacturers. This draft law was not accepted but people’s right against fast-food companies was blocked in front of justice.

              To sum up, obesity is common disease in America and there are a lot of reasons for obesity. First, Physical inactivity causes obesity. Second, unhealthy eating causes obesity. Final, fast food diet causes obesity. If the rate of obese people increases, the rate of death will increase. We should inform people about obesity disease.

                    

 

Argumentative Essay 1

                                       MORAL EDUCATION IN SCHOOLS       

        Children begin to moral education by applying the rules. Basic moral education is given by the parents.  First, a family teaches the rules of society. Mothers and fathers contribute to the moral education of children with attitudes. A family gives moral education to their children until school age. Even after children start to go school, more family wants their children’s to continue moral education at schools. While there are lot families who support this idea, there are also lot families who do not support moral education at schools when their children become a youth. I think schools should provide moral education for youth. There are many reasons for it.

         A criticism of moral education in school is that moral education in schools teaches young people to fulfill responsibilities. When a student does not do homework, her/his teacher punishes her/him. The teacher says that he/she should do homework. The teacher mentions about this small responsibility teach them to take great responsibility, moreover, it teaches using time equally. Thanks to moral education in schools, youth spends time not only activity but also responsibility.

         Some people say that moral education teaches to act respectful to all people. In family, youth learns that they should behave respectfully to elder people. In school, they learn that they should behave respectfully to all people. Teachers teach that young people should also behave respectfully to little people. Young people can understand that respect does not connect to age. School teaches this moral value to youth.

         A criticism of moral education in school is that moral education affects forming character. Schools show that how a person should be. Schools direct youth to become beneficial and upright. A teacher mentions about which character type is the best for humaneness. Generally, moral education is not enough to being upright. I think character is affected by family.

          In conclusion, schools should provide moral education for youth. There are many reasons for it. First reason is that moral education in school is that moral education teaches young people to fulfill responsibilities. Second is that moral education teaches to act respectful to all people. Third is that moral education in school is that moral education affects forming character.

Cause-Effect 2- first draft

                                               MUSIC IS FOOD FOR THE SOUL

            Music is a part of people’s culture and traditions. Every society has different kinds of music. Actually, every person listen different kinds of music. Your mood affects your music selection. For every mood, people listen to music. Generally, people think that music is food for the soul because there are the therapeutic effects of listening to music. Listening to music helps reducing stress, strengthening memory, working of heart, preventing of ageing human brain.

         One effect of music is that music can reduce stress. As a result of many researching, everyday listening music reduce stress. People who listen to music have more positive feelings. Music does not make the same effect on all people. The same music may show different effects depending on mood at that time. When you listen to your favorite music, you feel relax and positive. You should listen to music every time such as going to work or going to school.

         Another effect of music is that music can strengthen memory. Studying music lesson develop children’s brain more positive. Music lesson helps remember words in a list. People who took music lessons from an early age, has been observed to be more successful in remembering words. Listening to music should begin from infancy to benefit the positive effects of music. In California, after listening to a Mozart sonata, mice showed very high performance in tests of learning and memory.

        Another effect of music is that music affects working of heart. People meet with the music in the womb because even a man's heart depends on a regular rhythm. There is a relationship between music and heart health. Researchers have found that listening to upbeat music provides more blood flow to blood vessels. When you listen to anxiety and fear music, this rate is low. Also, music reduces anxiety. So, people feel less pain. On the other hand, music can reduce stress so heart is being affected positively.

         Another effect of music is that music prevents ageing of brain. Despite of the advancing age, music education may make a keen intelligence. Listening to classical music and activating different parts of the brain is very important. With those caveats, contacting with each other of brain cells are getting better quality and intelligence is increasing.

           In conclusion, effects of listening to music are that music helps reducing stress, strengthening memory, working of heart, preventing of ageing human brain. We can’t say that listening to music has always negative effects. There are a lot of people who damage themselves after listening to some music. For example, while people were listening to Müslüm Gürses, they were injured their body.

 

Cause Effect Essay 1- Second Draft

                                               The List of Factors Affecting Your Mode

                  People’s mood may change every moment. People may become a different personality in five minutes. Last summer, we all family went to picnic. Everyone was so happy because of weather. After one or two days, it was rain and again we all family came together. There was no problem but everyone seemed uncomfortable. Actually, there are many factors that influence your mood. Sometimes, this factor is people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition.

              Firstly, people’s behaviors affect your mood positively or negatively. If you have a pessimistic friend, you have not got chance for being happy. Your friend’s ideas affect you negatively. You may think that there is no good thing in the world. Pessimistic people take away you from your hopes. While you are choosing a friend, you should think her or his attitude about life. When you have got an optimistic friend around you, you may successful for a lot of things.

            Secondly, colors of your cloths affect your mood positively or negatively. There is also the sense of colors and almost all the meanings of the colors are close to each other in the world. There are effects of color on human psychology. For example; warm colors such as red can bring you joy. One of the cool colors is blue which can give you calmness. Black color concentration and self-confidence increases. Purple color may adversely affect the subconscious.

               Thirdly, weather conditions affect your mood positively or negatively. Cloudy weather has a negative impact on human psychology. In this situation, people become restless and nervous. Because of the level of serotonin hormone, people behave as depressive. Therefore, especially in northern countries called winter depression disease is seen. You should sport and stay away from alcohol and cigarettes. Sunny weather affects positive people. On the basis of this event, sunlight affects the level of certain chemicals of human emotion.

           Finally, your health’s condition affects your mood positively or negatively. When you are ill, you can’t feel happy or energetic. The level of your mood is on the ground. You do not want to speak with people or you do not want to somewhere. Generally, you are in the bed. In contrast this mood, when you have got any problems, you feel energetic. Generally, you are sociable because you have love of life. The level of your mood may be over the clouds.

         To sum up, there are a lot of factors that influence your mood. These are people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition. Whenever you feel bad mood, you should think these causes and you may find your problem’s cause. Also, you may find other factors that influence your mood.

 

Cause and Effect Essay 1-First Draft

    

                                                The List of Factors Affecting Your Mode

                  People’s mood may change every moment. People may be a different person in five minutes. Last summer, we all family went to picnic. Everyone was so happy because of weather. After one or two days, it was rain and again we all family came together. There was no problem but everyone seemed uncomfortable. Actually, there are many factors that influence your mood. Sometimes, this factor is people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition.

              Firstly, people’s behaviors affect your mood positively or negatively. If you have pessimistic a friend, you have not got chance for being happy. Your friend’s ideas affect you negatively. You may think that there is no good thing in the world. Pessimistic people take away you from your hopes. While you are choosing a friend, you should think her or his attitude about life. When you have got optimistic friend around you, you may success for a lot of things.

            Secondly, your cloths’ colors affect your mood positively or negatively. There is also the sense of colors and almost all the meanings of the colors are close to each other in the world. There are effects of color on human psychology. For example; warm colors such as red can bring you joy. One of the cool colors is blue which can give you calmness. Black color concentration and self-confidence increases. Purple color may adversely affect the subconscious.

               Thirdly, weather conditions affect your mood positively or negatively. Cloudy weather has a negative impact on human psychology. In this situation, people become restless and nervous. Because of the level of serotot hormone, people behave as depressive. Therefore, especially in northern countries called winter depression disease is seen. You should sport and stay away from alcohol and cigarettes. Sunny weather affects positive people. On the basis of this event, sunlight affects the level of certain chemicals of human emotion.

           Finally, your health’s condition affects your mood positively or negatively. When you are ill, you can’t feel happy or energetic. The level of your mood is on the ground. You do not want to speak with people or you do not want to somewhere. Generally, you are in the bed. In contrast this mood, when you have got any problems, you feel energetic. Generally, you are sociable because you have love of life. The level of your mood may be over the clouds.

         To sum up, there are a lot of factors that influence your mood. These are people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition. Whenever you feel bad mood, you should think these causes and you may find your problem’s cause. Also, you may find other factors that influence your mood.

 

division essay-Second draft

                                         The Altered Properties of Istanbul

             Every empire has added something new to a city and a lot of things have been changed. In Istanbul, which was the capital of many governments, these changes can be clearly seen. The language, art, and education of İstanbul have been changed by many governments.

          Language is the altered property of Istanbul. Every empire uses their language because spoken language shows which empire is dominant. During the Byzantine Empire, Greek was the official language in Istanbul. After the conquest of Istanbul, the official language has changed. Ottoman Empire used their language which was Turkish. Within the borders of the Empire, there were communities belonging to different language groups. The Ottoman Turkish used in the palace, although the areas under the domination used other languages. Also, when the republic of Turkey was established, the government announced the official language Turkish.

       Another altered property of Istanbul is art. Generally, the Byzantine Empire was built churches. They showed their own art with the church. One of the most distinctive features of Byzantine architecture, the structure is in the form of giant domes. On the other hand, murals, mosaics, miniatures and decorative arts such as labor Byzantine ivory were very good. Byzantine mosaic art and the most beautiful examples of the wall ornamentation appear in Hagias Sophia, Kariye Camii, Tekfur Palace and the Church of San Vitale in Ravenna. After this empire, Ottoman Empire showed their art through the mosques. Great mosques were built many part of Istanbul. For example; Selimiye Mosque shows Ottoman Empire’s art.

        Another altered property of Istanbul is education. During the Byzantine Empire, education was given in the monasteries. Mostly boys were sent to school. Besides the religion courses, ancient Greek philosophy, language and literature, also mathematics courses were given. A lot of Byzantine donated big money or property to the monasteries. The monastery library was limited to mostly ritual books. Nevertheless, there was some great wide range of books in libraries. In Ottoman Empire, madrasas were established in order to educate people who are knowledgeable. The religious sciences were also offered positive sciences in madrasahs. Such as library buildings were located near madrasas.

        To sum up, each government adds something to the culture. The altered things aren’t only language, art and education. These changes can be observed in all areas of life. Every time, there are not positive effects. There can be negative effects.                                                                                                                                                           

Division Essay- First Draft

OUTLINE                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Thesis statement = the language, art, and education of İstanbul have been changed by many governments.           

Body paragraph 1

1.0.             Language is the altered property of Istanbul.

2.0.            During the Byzantine Empire, Greek was the official language in Istanbul.

3.0.            After the conquest of Istanbul, the official language has changed.

Body paragraph 2

1.0.            Another altered property of Istanbul is art.

2.0.            The Byzantine Empire was built churches.

3.0.            Ottoman Empire showed their art through the mosques.

Body paragraph 3

1.0.            Another altered property of Istanbul is education.

2.0.            During the Byzantine Empire, education was given in the monasteries.

3.0.            In Ottoman Empire, madrasas were established in order to educate people who are knowledgeable.

 

 

 

 

         

                                         The Altered Properties of Istanbul

             Every empire has added something new to a city and a lot of things have changed. In Istanbul, which was the capital of many governments, these changes can be clearly seen. The language, art, and education of İstanbul have been changed by many governments.

          Language is the altered property of Istanbul. Every empire uses their language because spoken language shows which empire is dominant. During the Byzantine Empire, Greek was the official language in Istanbul. After the conquest of Istanbul, the official language has changed. Ottoman Empire used their language which was Turkish. Within the borders of the Empire, there were communities belonging to different language groups. The Ottoman Turkish used in the palace, although the areas under the domination used other languages. Also, when the republic of Turkey was established, the government announced the official language Turkish.

       Another altered property of Istanbul is art. Generally, the Byzantine Empire was built churches. They showed their own art with the church. One of the most distinctive features of Byzantine architecture, the structure is in the form of giant domes. On the other hand, murals, mosaics, miniatures and decorative arts such as labor Byzantine ivory were very good. Byzantine mosaic art and the most beautiful examples of the wall ornamentation appear in Hagias Sophia, Kariye Camii, Tekfur Palace and the Church of San Vitale in Ravenna. After this empire, Ottoman Empire showed their art through the mosques. Great mosques were built many part of Istanbul. For example; Selimiye Mosque shows Ottoman Empire’s art.

        Another altered property of Istanbul is education. During the Byzantine Empire, education was given in the monasteries. Mostly boys were sent to school. Besides the religion courses, ancient Greek philosophy, language and literature, also mathematics courses were given. A lot of Byzantine donated big money or property to the monasteries. The monastery library was limited to mostly ritual books. Nevertheless, there was some great wide range of books in libraries. In Ottoman Empire, madrasas were established in order to educate people who are knowledgeable. The religious sciences were also offered positive sciences in madrasahs. Such as library buildings were located near madrasas.

           To sum up, each government adds something to the culture. The altered things aren’t only language, art and education. These changes can be observed in all areas of life. Every time, therearenot positive effects. There can be negative effects.                                                                         

 

 

 

 

 

 

compare and contrast essay 2- Second draft

                                                                                                         

               YOUNG PEOPLE AND OLD PEOPLE (LIKE A RABBIT AND TURTLE)

                    Last night there was my birthday party and I gave a party. I invited a lot of my relatives. That night was so wonderful. My cousins and I had got amusing time but I couldn’t say the same thing for my grandparents. While time was passing, they were getting bored. When we switched on music, they couldn’t stand music and they went to their home. That moment, I realized that young people’s lives are not like old people’s lives. In fact, the lives of young people and old people differ in terms of the time they spend activities, the kind of ideas, the speed of their movements, the using of technologic devices.

                 First, young people and old people spend different amounts of time with activities. Young people spend more time with activities than old people do. Young people always are energetic. They have a lot of parties, games. Generally, they do something in contrast old people aren’t busy. They sit at home and they go to out randomly. Their relatives visit them at their home. Old people only go weddings.

               Second, young people and old people have different ideas. Young people don’t think everything in detail. They can easily choose in contrast old people are so selective. For example; when young people want to buy a dress, they don’t wait to buy it. The important thing is young people’s feelings. Their ideas are for saving day. Old people don’t like young people. Choosing a dress or something else isn’t easy for old people. They think everything with details. When they think to buy that dress, they think the next day.

               Third, young people and old people have different speeds to do something. Young people are more active than old people. Young people have advantage thanks to their body. Their body is dynamic and fresh. So, they don’t tired easily. They can run for a long time and they can work without break. Old people are absolutely different from young people for this state. Old people aren’t strong so they don’t do tiresome things. They like heavy working machine. After a while, their engine doesn’t start. Also, we can say that young people and old people are like rabbit and turtle.

                The last difference is the using technologic devices. Young people use continually technology. They are interested in technologic devices. Formerly, people wrote letter but now, they use e-mail. Young people do all their needs with technology. Generally, old people don’t use technology. So, old people want to do something, they may spend a lot of time and they may come across difficulty.

                To sum up, people’s age affect their life. Young people and old people differ from each other. Whereas young people think their life is better than old people’s life, old people have opposite idea. This opposition is known for a long time. There is a word : ‘’Every age has different beauties.’’

           

 

comparision and contrast essay 2-First draft

 

                                   YOUNG PEOPLE AND OLD PEOPLE (LIKE A RABBIT AND TURTLE)

                    Last night there was my birthday party. I gave a party. I invited a lot of my relatives. That night was so wonderful. My cousins and I had got amusing time but I couldn’t say the same thing for my grandparents. While time was passing, they were getting bored. When we switched on music, they couldn’t stand music and they went to their home. That moment, I realized that young people’s lives do not like old people’s lives. In fact, the lives of young people and old people differ in terms of the time they spend activities, the kind of ideas, the speed of their movements, the using of technologic devices.

                 First, young people and old people spend different amounts of time with activities. Young people spend more time with activities than old people do. Young people always are energetic. They have a lot of parties, games. Generally, they do something in contrast old people aren’t busy. They sit at home and they go to out randomly. Their relatives visit them at their home. Old people only go weddings.

               Second, young people and old people have different ideas. Young people don’t think everything in detail. They can easily choose in contrast old people are so selective. For example; when young people want to buy a dress, they don’t wait to buy it. The important thing is young people’s feelings. Their ideas are for saving day. Old people don’t like young people. Choosing a dress or something else isn’t easy for old people. They think everything with details. When they think buy that dress, they think the next day.

               Third, young people and old people have different speeds to do something. Young people are more active than old people. Young people have advantage thanks to their body. Their body is dynamic and fresh. So, they don’t tired easily. They can run for a long time and they can work without break. Old people are absolutely different from young people for this state. Old people aren’t strong so they don’t do tiresome things. They like heavy working machine. After a while, their engine doesn’t start. Also, we can say that young people and old people like rabbit and turtle.

                The last difference is the using technologic devices. Young people use continual technology. They are interested in technologic devices. Formerly, people wrote letter but now, they use e-mail. Young people do all their needs with technology. Generally, old people don’t use technology. So, old people want to do something, they may spend a lot of time and they may come across difficulty.

                To sum up, people’s age affect their life. Young people and old people differ from each other. Whereas young people think their life is better than old people’s life, old people have opposite idea. This opposition is known for a long time. There is a word : ‘’Every age has different beauties.’’

           

 

                            

Second Draft: Comparison and contrast 1

                My Grandmother’s  Generation  And  My Generation

While our country is developing, the  rate  of generation   differences   is   increasing   day  by  day. I  can  give so easy  examples  from   my   family. There   are  a  lot  of  differences  between   my    grandmother’s    generation    and  my  generation. For   example; spending   time   on  work, using  technologic  device  and  clothing  style.

  First, my grandmother’s generation spent  their   time with  housework. They did not work  for  earning  money. When they were young,  only  men   earned   money. Nowadays, my generation spend less   time with   housework   than  my  grandmother’s  generation. We are working  for  earning  money. We don’t wait money from  only  men. My generation can earn  money the same amount   men’s  money. However, my generation can have job which  men  can  do.

   Second, my  grandmother’s  generation  use  technologic  device  less  than  my  generation. They  were  able to use     only  home  appliances. Also, my generation can use  home  appliances. Addition  to  home   appliances, my  generation  use other technologic  devices  such  as  mobile  phone ,  computer. Thanks  to this  advantage ,  my  generation   can do a lot of works   in a short   time.

Thirdly, clothing   style of my  grandmother’s  generation   differs from  my  generation. They  wore  long  dresses  and  black  cloth. This  style  has  changed  up our  time. It   is not  matter  that wearing long  or  short   dresses  for my  generation. Everybody   can wear everything. My generation also  wear headscarf .Formerly, women didn’t use headscarf freely.But now, we are so free  while we are using it.

Day by day, new differences are added to  life.  We  can  say that  these  differences  will  change  for  every  new  generation because of developing technology. Today, we think that  our grandmother’s generation is different from ours. When we have got grandchild, they can be think that our generation would  separate  from theirs.

  OUTLINE

1.  Spending   their   time on   work

a. My   grandmother’s   generation      
         1. Spending time at home with housework
         2. Didn’t work for earn money

   b. My generation

          1. Living their home less than my grandmother’s generation

         2. Earning money as amount as men’s money

 2. Using technologic device

a. My grandmother’s   generation

            1. Using home appliances

b. My generation
 
             1. Addition to home appliances-using mobile phone

  3. Clothing style

a. My grandmother’s   generation

           1. Wearing long dress

            2. Wearing black cloth

b. My generation

           1. It isn’t matter that wearing long or short dress

            2. Wearing head scarf