MUSIC IS FOOD FOR THE SOUL
Music
is a part of people’s culture and traditions. Every society has different kinds
of music. Actually, every person listen different kinds of music. Your mood
affects your music selection. For every mood, people listen to music.
Generally, people think that music is food for the soul because there are the
therapeutic effects of listening to music. Listening to music helps reducing
stress, strengthening memory, working of heart, preventing of ageing human
brain.
One effect of music is that music can
reduce stress. As a result of many researching, everyday listening music reduce
stress. People who listen to music have more positive feelings. Music does not
make the same effect on all people. The same music may show different effects
depending on mood at that time. When you listen to your favorite music, you
feel relax and positive. You should listen to music every time such as going to
work or going to school.
Another effect of music is that music
can strengthen memory. Studying music lesson develop children’s brain more
positive. Music lesson helps remember words in a list. People who took music
lessons from an early age, has been observed to be more successful in
remembering words. Listening to music should begin from infancy to benefit the
positive effects of music. In California, after listening to a Mozart sonata,
mice showed very high performance in tests of learning and memory.
Another effect of music is that music
affects working of heart. People meet with the music in the
womb because even a man's heart depends on a regular rhythm. There
is a relationship between music and heart health. Researchers have found that listening
to upbeat music provides more blood flow to blood vessels. When you listen to
anxiety and fear music, this rate is low. Also, music reduces anxiety. So, people
feel less pain. On the other hand, music can reduce stress so heart is being
affected positively.
Another effect of music is that music
prevents ageing of brain. Despite of the advancing age, music education may
make a keen intelligence. Listening to classical music and
activating different parts of the brain is very important. With
those caveats, contacting with each other of brain cells are getting better
quality and intelligence is increasing.
In conclusion, effects of listening
to music are that music helps reducing stress, strengthening memory, working of
heart, preventing of ageing human brain. We can’t say that listening to music
has always negative effects. There are a lot of people who damage themselves
after listening to some music. For example, while people were listening to
Müslüm Gürses, they were injured their body.
1)Actually, every person listen different kinds of music. -2. line of intr.( subject- verb agreement)
YanıtlaSil2) everyday listening music reduce stress.-2. line of 1. body p.(subject -verb agreemant)
3) Studying music lesson develop children’s brain more positive- 2. line of 2.body p.( subject-verb agreement)
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Sil1-) listen different kinds of music ( listen is never followed by a noun. Use "to" and then a noun or a clause. (paragraph 1, line 2)
YanıtlaSil2-) For every mood, people listen to music. (expand the sentence so that what you try to write might become more clear.) ( paragraph 1 ,line 3,4)
3-) because there are the (wrong usage of article) therapeutic effects of listening to music. (paragraph 1, line 5)
2) I think previous sentence supports this sentence. 'Thank you'
Sil1)People who took music lessons from an early age, has* been observed to be more successful in remembering words: Subject verb agreement ( 3. body paragraph).
YanıtlaSil2)Listening to classical music and activating different parts of the brain is* very important : Subject verb agreement ( 4.body paragraph )
3)We can’t* say that listening to music has always negative effects: we shouldn't use short form like can't in our essays. It is better to use ''cannot''.( conclusion parag.).
1)thank you
Sil1)As a result of many researching, ( I think that it is better to use 'many researches' instead of using 'many researching'.)
YanıtlaSil2)They were injured their body.(wrong usage of verb-last paragraph)