14 Nisan 2014 Pazartesi

Cause and Effect Essay 1-First Draft

    
                                                The List of Factors Affecting Your Mode

                  People’s mood may change every moment. People may be a different person in five minutes. Last summer, we all family went to picnic. Everyone was so happy because of weather. After one or two days, it was rain and again we all family came together. There was no problem but everyone seemed uncomfortable. Actually, there are many factors that influence your mood. Sometimes, this factor is people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition.

              Firstly, people’s behaviors affect your mood positively or negatively. If you have pessimistic a friend, you have not got chance for being happy. Your friend’s ideas affect you negatively. You may think that there is no good thing in the world. Pessimistic people take away you from your hopes. While you are choosing a friend, you should think her or his attitude about life. When you have got optimistic friend around you, you may success for a lot of things.

            Secondly, your cloths’ colors affect your mood positively or negatively. There is also the sense of colors and almost all the meanings of the colors are close to each other in the world. There are effects of color on human psychology. For example; warm colors such as red can bring you joy. One of the cool colors is blue which can give you calmness. Black color concentration and self-confidence increases. Purple color may adversely affect the subconscious.

               Thirdly, weather conditions affect your mood positively or negatively. Cloudy weather has a negative impact on human psychology. In this situation, people become restless and nervous. Because of the level of serotot hormone, people behave as depressive. Therefore, especially in northern countries called winter depression disease is seen. You should sport and stay away from alcohol and cigarettes. Sunny weather affects positive people. On the basis of this event, sunlight affects the level of certain chemicals of human emotion.

           Finally, your health’s condition affects your mood positively or negatively. When you are ill, you can’t feel happy or energetic. The level of your mood is on the ground. You do not want to speak with people or you do not want to somewhere. Generally, you are in the bed. In contrast this mood, when you have got any problems, you feel energetic. Generally, you are sociable because you have love of life. The level of your mood may be over the clouds.

         To sum up, there are a lot of factors that influence your mood. These are people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition. Whenever you feel bad mood, you should think these causes and you may find your problem’s cause. Also, you may find other factors that influence your mood.

 

8 yorum:

  1. 1-) People may be a different person in five minutes. (revise this sentence)

    2-) Last summer, we all family went to picnic. (article) (paragraph 1, line 2)

    3-) serotot (spelling) (paragraph 4, line 3)

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    1. salih 1)People may become a different person in five minutes. ( ?)
      2) Which article ? I checked my sentence by online text correction but still, I can't find my mistake.
      3) 'serotonin' Thank you for comments.

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  2. salih 1)People may become a different person in five minutes. ( ?)
    2) Which article ? I checked my sentence by online text correction but still, I can't find my mistake.
    3) 'serotonin' Thank you for comments.

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  3. 1)Sometimes, this factor is people’s behaviors, your cloths’ color, weather conditions or your health’s condition.==> You can use a modal. For example: Sometimes, this can be....
    2)Pessimistic people take away you from your hopes. Rewrite this sentence
    => You can't write ' take away you from'.
    3)...you may success for* a lot of things.=> 'for' is not necessary.

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    1. 1) We can also use a modal.In this sentence, I gave the certain factors.So, I couldn't use 'can be'.
      2)We can use 'take away ... from'
      3) ..you may successful for a lot of things.

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  4. 1) If you have pessimistic a friend ---> word order
    2) When you have got optimistic friend around you ---> missing an article
    3) your cloths’ colors affect your mood positively or negatively --->" colors of your cloths" is more correct.

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    1. 1) If you have a pessimistic friend..
      2)When you have got an optimistic friend around you ..
      3)my sentence is also correct :)

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    2. Generally, we use "of " for objects instead of "s".

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