MORAL
EDUCATION IN SCHOOLS
Children begin to moral education by applying
the rules. Basic moral education is given by the parents. First, a family teaches the rules of society.
Mothers and fathers contribute to the moral education of children with
attitudes. A family gives moral education to their children until school age. Even
after children start to go school, more family wants their children’s to
continue moral education at schools. While there are lot families who support
this idea, there are also lot families who do not support moral education at
schools when their children become a youth. I think schools should provide
moral education for youth. There are many reasons for it.
A
criticism of moral education in school is that moral education in schools
teaches young people to fulfill responsibilities. When a student does not do
homework, her/his teacher punishes her/him. The teacher says that he/she should
do homework. The teacher mentions about this small responsibility teach them to
take great responsibility, moreover, it teaches using time equally. Thanks to
moral education in schools, youth spends time not only activity but also
responsibility.
Some people say that moral education
teaches to act respectful to all people. In family, youth learns that they should
behave respectfully to elder people. In school, they learn that they should
behave respectfully to all people. Teachers teach that young people should also
behave respectfully to little people. Young people can understand that respect
does not connect to age. School teaches this moral value to youth.
A criticism of moral education in
school is that moral education affects forming character. Schools show that how
a person should be. Schools direct youth to become beneficial and upright. A
teacher mentions about which character type is the best for humaneness. Generally,
moral education is not enough to being upright. I think character is affected
by family.
In conclusion, schools should provide
moral education for youth. There are many reasons for it. First reason is that
moral education in school is that moral education teaches young people to
fulfill responsibilities. Second is that moral education teaches to act
respectful to all people. Third is that moral education in school is that moral
education affects forming character.
1. more family(?) wants (sing-plural) their children’s to continue moral education at schools.
YanıtlaSil2. Schools show that(that is unnecessary) how a person should be
1)Even after children start to go school, more family wants their children’s to continue moral education at* schools : article error (paragraph 1)
YanıtlaSil2)there are also lot* families who do not support moral education at schools when their children become a youth : quantity word is wrong (paragraph 1)
3)First reason is that (moral education in school is that moral education) teaches young people to fulfill responsibilities: Something is wrong in this sentence. ( conclusion prag.)
1) Children begin to(delete) moral education by applying (prep) the rules.
YanıtlaSil2) more family wants their children’s (delete apostrophe) to continue moral education at schools.
3) The teacher mentions about this small responsibility (add a coordinator) teach them to take great responsibility,
1-) I think schools should provide moral education for youth. There are many reasons for it. ( name these reasons or your thesis will not help the readers continue reading.)
YanıtlaSil2-) In family, youth (you need to use "the" before "youth" )learns (then you need to change the verb form according to your subject) that they should behave respectfully to elder people. (paragraph 3 , line 2)